There are a lot of good points raised here. Like your earlier piece it's a little muddled. My takeaway is that you are encouraging other non-Western writers to "be in the service of the greater good and so we must not allow the delusional state of white supremacy to continued unchallenged".

You want narratives other than those from a Western Eurocentric viewpoint.

I liked the comment about kids experience of history as being "nothing much happening until the Whites arrived". That is really spot on, from both sides. Long term, changing that is how you get deep cultural change.

People cannot be proud of their history, if they don't know they have one.

That is what you are saying right? It is a powerful point, which goes to the heart of why so many Right Wing White Nationalist groups are so crazed about school curricula. Knowing your history is important, it gives you a place to stand when you speak.

As a reviewer, I would write on this paper "who is your intended audience?". You drift off on tangents when you lose sight of that. It never becomes clear here, who you are speaking for and speaking to. Which is why the essay, although solid, needs a rewrite and a bit of tightening.