Richard Crim
Jan 29, 2023

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As a scream against EXTINCTION AS USUAL, this is a fantastic piece. As a performance "spoken word" piece it has potential. As poetry, it needs work.

Your passion comes through but the wording is not quite right. As I read it. I keep hitting little awkward points where the rhythmic flow of words breaks.

What exactly do you mean by the admonishment to not join an environmental organization if it's led by someone White? I think I understand what you are saying because I think you are referencing an idea or argument. Much like your very clever Eurokleptocene contains an entire argument in a single word.

That's pretty rarefied understanding for most readers. To the average person that line makes you look "anti-white". Was that your intent?

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Richard Crim
Richard Crim

Written by Richard Crim

My entire life can be described in one sentence: Things didn’t go as planned, and I’m OK with that.

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